Jude Hardin

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Friday, May 14, 2010

Pocket-47 Flap Jacket Copy

Twenty years after crawling from the fiery wreckage of a chartered jet and witnessing his wife and daughter perish, private investigator Nicholas Colt makes a horrifying discovery while tracking a runaway teenage girl.

Fifteen-year-old Brittney Ryan is in trouble. Fearing for her life because of some incriminating evidence she stumbled upon, she takes to the streets. Colt is hired to find her, but soon finds himself in an ever-widening maze of deceit, betrayal, and murder. One treacherous path leads to another, the obstacles and pitfalls seemingly endless.

And, when Colt hears the mysterious phrase Pocket-47 for the first time--and then learns what it means--the stakes are raised to new levels.

Determined to save Brittney and untangle the threads of his own tortured past, Colt eventually squares off with one of the most heinous and violent criminals in modern history. Lucius Strychar is a television preacher, militia leader, and raving lunatic.

With Strychar’s army on his tail and time quickly running out, Colt must struggle for his one chance to exhume the astonishing secret kept buried for two decades.



Thoughts? Suggestions? I would like to hear from anyone who loves books.

10 Comments:

Blogger Mark Terry said...

Did you write it or someone at Oceanview?

I like it, but there feels like an odd transition between the first and second paragraphs. Might just be me.

12:07 PM  
Blogger Erica Orloff said...

Yeah. I'm with Mark. it's choppy . . . and there's not enough linking the jet, the book title, the girl, the incriminating evidence, the preacher, the . . . just feels like 6 different elements with no link.

12:15 PM  
Blogger Jude Hardin said...

I wrote it, Mark. Frank Troncale (who is taking Susan Gregor's job when she retires in January) called me yesterday and said they would need synopses of 50, 100, and 175 words. This is the 175, for the flap jacket.

12:21 PM  
Blogger Jude Hardin said...

Any suggestions for ironing it out, Erica? You know how much I LOVE to write synopses, LOL.

12:22 PM  
Blogger Mark Terry said...

I'll give it a shot sometime today and see what I can come up with. I think the elements are there--and no, I don't really like doing this for my own work, but you do get better with practice.

12:33 PM  
Blogger Mark Terry said...

What about this? I basically rearranged things. Comments, anybody?

Private investigator Nicholas Colt specializes in finding missing persons. Colt is hired to find fifteen-year-old Brittney Ryan, but soon finds himself in an ever-widening maze of deceit, betrayal, and murder. One treacherous path leads to another, the obstacles and pitfalls seemingly endless.

During the course of his hunt, Colt hears the mysterious phrase Pocket-47 for the first time. It tugs at his memory, but he doesn’t know why—until he learns what it means. Twenty years ago Colt had crawled from the fiery wreckage of a chartered jet as his wife and daughter perished in the flames.

Does Pocket-47 connect to the single worst period in his life? Was the plane crash that changed his life forever something more sinister than a horrible accident? How does Brittney Ryan tie in?

Determined to save Brittney and untangle the threads of his own tortured past, Colt eventually squares off with one of the most heinous and violent criminals in modern history. Lucius Strychar is a television preacher, militia leader, and raving lunatic.

With Strychar’s army on his tail and time quickly running out, Colt must struggle for his one chance to exhume the astonishing secret kept buried for two decades.

2:27 PM  
Blogger LurkerMonkey said...

Jude,

Woo hoo! Jacket copy! This is very cool.

I'm kind of with Erica on this. It feels like a bit like an overworked stew, with an awful lot of elements kicking around, and my attention started to drift toward the end. Is there a way to distill, distill, distill, and sharpen your focus on the the different and interesting parts?

3:37 PM  
Blogger Jude Hardin said...

Thanks for trying Mark, but I think the same issues are probably still there. I'll keep working on it.

3:51 PM  
Blogger Jude Hardin said...

Jon:

Are you trying to say it's just too winey? ;)

There really is an art to these things. I'll try to distill and focus!

3:56 PM  
Blogger LurkerMonkey said...

Give me an hour or two and I'll probably be the winey one :)

4:01 PM  

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